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The gyre of Time holds it's sway,
The moonlight ridding high on decay,
Colored Blue, colored true
Whispers pause to ask 'Who'?
If you know the rules you'll see they're only tools

The blood cloth folds around a sword
They all follow blindly that dazzling cord
Lock pick magistracy, framed decency
The geometry of sacrifice hilts the logic of mercy
Caged instead of flesh is the honest reflection of self

Shadows dance when a Good Man goes to war
Fear will surge over a last chance when a Good Man goes to war
Chaos's spiral gate, with it's maw agape,
Calls on friends of old to face their fate when a Good Man goes to war
But blink and it's all for naught as always athwart is what was sought

Out from the final tower's lonely bell
Toll the moans of living hell
Lost is the moon, lost is the tomb
Blackened claws pluck fire from the womb
Reaching out across the stars, as war that crackles only far

From candle to cradle burnt out
This child is stolen, so without a doubt
Space will roar, dead gods abhor
As the last face of Gallifrey soars
Look beside the horrid surface, there it masks a darker purpose

Demons run when a Good Man goes to war
Night will fall and drown the sun when A Good Man goes to war
Friendship dies and true love lies
Night will fall and the dark will rise when a Good Man goes to war
Demons Run but count the cost, the battle's won but the child is lost


Time drops down in the sand
Counting out the clock's long hand
Innocence shakes, bones quake
That which is, is what we make
A leaf may float or fly and give hope to read by

Cried to apotheosis by Weeping Angels
Nightmares, the most hideous form, in you now tangles
Dissolving deep, death's hands seep
And shatters a Good Man's heart to keep
This is the worse death than a body without breathe

Space shudders when a Good Man goes to war
Hope writhes and despair flutters when a Good Man goes to war
All seeds born and all souls torn
To witness now what Time does scorn when a Good Man goes to war
Because look at what you've done but look at what you've become
ITALIC PART NOT BY ME

[[[EDIT 4.6.11: added that last line and adjusted the whole thing to reflect the new pattern]]]]

(there needs to be a Fan Art - Fan Poetry gallery...)

River's poem felt like it was just a was part of a bigger poem, so I started trying to write it...

I tried to keep it vague enough that whatever happens tomorrow it will still fit...here's hoping.
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ArtistOfDawn Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
beautifully done. instant favorite.
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LionKingIsMyLife Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Student General Artist
Dude, this is awesome! Faved!
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Hamsterrobot Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011
Fav'd it. Beautiful! i love this... this should be the actual poem its so good. :D
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sharded Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011
thank you!!!
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Angel-of-the-doctor Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011  Student General Artist
This is just...wow....
Part of me doesn't fully understand it (^^;), but the part of me that does is absolutely stunned! There should be more fanarts for River's poem, like this one!!
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2011
haha, it doesn't actually make sense. part of it is because I wrote most of it before the ep aired so I had to be vague, obscure, and random.
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Angel-of-the-doctor Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2011  Student General Artist
Oh, wow, I didn't know that. Very interesting...
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Xi-Theta Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011
fear the epic poetry!
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011
people should fear my poetry, I've never understood why more people don't scream and run from it
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Xi-Theta Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
ah, its got that irresitible charm about it, thats why!
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011
thank you very much!
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Moonlight109 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! In fact, right after I saw the episode last night, I sort of made my own...

Demons run when a good man goes to war.
Happiness is shunned when a good man goes to war.
Death will live and life will die,
like the catchers in the rye,
when a good man goes to war.

And, of course, I had to go and make one that related to the Shadow People: :XD:

Shadows run, but not away
they will all return someday.
like darkness when a light's put out
you'll know what evil's all about.
they will return, and you'll know when
it's only a matter of time, my friend...
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
meep! how scary!
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Moonlight109 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I know! Wanna hear something scarrier? I REMEMBERED BOTH LATER ON, DURING SCHOOL, AND WROTE THEM DOWN FOR A FRIEND WHO DIDN'T CARE. :XD:
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2011
LOL. my mind is a leaky bucket. I remember verrrrry little. I have all these fantastic thoughts when I"m in the shower or somewhere else where it's hard to write...and they're all floating out in space, lost.
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Moonlight109 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I'll always think of something RIGHT as I'm finally drifting off to sleep, and I'm like 'nooo, I'm asleep... I don't wanna write it down...' so then I don't, and I wake up and I think 'CRAAAAAAAP-' :XD:
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2011
oh yes. I lose so many ideas to the fact that we haven't installed a computer in my brain yet. it would be full of little mental note pad files with random ideas on them
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Moonlight109 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
OHMYGOD yes. I need a computer in my brain. A big one. 'Cuz it's gotta store every single Doctor Who, White Collar, Supernatural, and Mentalist TV episode. Plus every story. And everything else. :rofl:
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011
LOL.
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cbako01 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
Aww <33 That is amazing Sharded!
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
thanks!!
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cbako01 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
Your welcome ^^ Its lovely and it flows <33 It sounds as if it could have been the rest of the poem
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
thanks! there was a bit more to the poem and I'm updating it to include the new lines and to adjust because of it (it means I have to add a bunch more lines, LOL, but now I've seen the episode it's easier)
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cbako01 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
Ooooh! I can't wait to read it!! :excited:
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011
you'll have to tell me if you liked it better before or not, haha
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cbako01 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
After ^^

Those new lines are just perfect <3333
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sharded Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011
thank you!!
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